Peer Review of Narration

When I started the review of another persons' narration paper, I started to think about my own and some ways or styles that I should have written with my own. After I read the narration about reviewing some one's elses work, I had to read my co-students' paper several times to analyze the style of writing she used for her narration. Her paper had a good story line but the thesis and the conclusion needed more information to link the paragraphs together. Some of the sentences needed to be joined together and there could have been some more detail about the subject and place in the narration. By doing this review, It made me think more about my own paper and the necessary revisions that I will need to perform with my own work. I started my own narration with more information than I needed to fulfill the requirements of the paper. By doing this, I realized that I needed to shorten the title and concentrate more on a single idea so that I could add detail for the senses. Only then could any reader get a more detailed or imaginative feeling for the subject that I would be writing about. I am going to do this for my narration in the next revision.